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Angela Perry

"Between Spirit and Dust" by Angela Perry

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Where I live, the deer are protected and not hunted, so they wander freely through the neighborhoods. When you look into their eyes, you get the feeling they know a lot more about us than we do them...
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David Palmer pressed gloved hands deeper into his pockets and hunched his shoulders, breath puffing into the frigid night air. What a night for old Sprocket to kick up his heels and jump the paddock fence. David strained his ears for any sound that might indicate where the gray gelding had wandered. Only his own footsteps, crunching too loudly on the ice-coated ground, broke the utter stillness.

Eyes watering from the cold, David stopped and squinted across the frozen terrain. A full moon cast stark patches of light and dark across the rolling hills, sparkling in the furred frost coating the sagebrush and winter grasses. The piercing blackness of the night sky was peppered with sharp white pinpoints of light, hints of frost in the heavens that reflected earth’s chill. Nothing moved in this silent, dead world.

A twig cracked in the distance, a tiny sound amplified by the silence. David peered ahead and, near the top of the ridge, spotted a large shadow moving through the gray frost. David rubbed his eyes free of blurring moisture and crept after the shadow, moving slowly to avoid alerting his quarry. He stepped carefully, aiming for ghostly patches of grass and avoiding gravel and deadfall.

A twisted juniper at the top of the rise afforded him some cover, and he pressed near it as he peered around, grasping the leather halter in his pocket. It was not Sprocket, however, who wandered the ridge; it was merely a doe. She stepped daintily between the huddled sagebrush, the silver light picking out the white patches on her muzzle and flanks in glowing relief, her natural camouflage throwing the rest of her into shadow. David’s coat brushed against the prickly foliage of the juniper, and the doe’s head came up, her enormous ears twitching as she sought the source of the sound.

The night’s cold must have confounded even the doe’s sharp sense of smell, for she moved on again after several moments, failing to locate David’s huddled figure. In the stillness, David could hear her soft footfalls as she moved away up the incline of the hill.

Muttering silently, David prepared to follow her example and move along. Why tonight? he thought again, his mind drifting back to the warm kitchen where he had left his wife cleaning up the remains of a late dinner. It has to be the coldest night of the year. He was so preoccupied with his thoughts that he nearly missed seeing a second shadow moving toward the hill.

David stopped short, then shrugged slightly as a second deer topped the rise, following the trail of the first. A herd must be passing through. His supposition was confirmed as a third doe topped the rise, trailed by a fawn and a yearling buck. Again he started down the hill when a silhouette against the night sky stopped him. A huge stag crested the hill with slow and stately grace, his heavily antlered head held high. The moonlight touched the points; ten…no, twelve!...branches shone dully, not yet having succumbed to winter shedding.

In awe, David crouched low and crept back to the relative shelter of the twisted juniper, his eyes locked on the massive animal walking toward him. The stag came to a halt not far from David’s hiding place. So close was he that David could pick out individual hairs in the coarse winter coat that bunched thickly around the animal’s neck and shoulders.

Around him, the herd of deer milled quietly, grazing lightly on patches of silver grass. The size of the herd had grown considerably since David’s attention was captured by the magnificent stag that guarded them. Nearly thirty deer thronged the hilltop, greeting each other with delicate rubs and touches. Their breath steamed in the air, catching rays of moonlight as it floated up and dissipated into the night sky.

The stag moved closer to the herd, keeping himself slightly aloof, and pawed lightly at the ground, drawing David’s gaze down for an instant. A chill mist had covered the ground, swirling around delicate feet and slender legs. The strangeness of the vapor broke upon David. It’s too cold for mist. Everything’s frozen.

Despite the impossibility of its existence, the thick fog crept over David’s legs and feet, forming a swirling river that rippled toward the deer. David glanced up to see a doe roll her eyes and stamp nervously. The entire herd appeared anxious, as if aware that the mist was unnatural. It flowed in from all around, stroking the deer lovingly as it surged and fell. Slowly, the mist gathered into a cloud in what soon became the center of the herd as they backed warily away from the miasma.

Spellbound, David watched as the roiling mist thickened and rose high into the obsidian sky. He was not certain exactly when the mist stopped being a formless cloud, but suddenly an enormous stag made of billowing, frosty haze loomed above them all. Sparks colored an electric blue slowly revealed themselves as the misty deer opened its cadaverous eyes and stared earthward.

David cried out and fell backward from his crouch; he couldn’t help himself. But nothing happened. The deer didn’t flee at the unexpected sound. The large stag that led the herd did not wheel defensively. The ethereal stag did not fix its sapphire gaze on David. It was as if everything were frozen in silence, and David did not exist.

All eyes were turned upward to meet the wraithlike gaze, all feet stilled. The only movement was the icy breath that rose from each pair of nostrils. The translucent deer shook its insubstantial antlers, then bent its neck toward a doe standing near the back of the herd. At the touch of the mist-deer’s nose on hers, the doe was released from the spell that held her. She stumbled backward, trembling. She was old, David could see, her hips poking sharply through her withers, her muzzle graying. Despite her age, she still moved gracefully as she took one tentative step, then another. Forward. Her front knees bent, and she bowed herself low to the misty ground.

David watched as the ghostly stag bent his head slightly in return, then turned toward another deer. This one, a yearling fawn, jumped wildly at the eerie touch on his nose, then huddled next to his mother. Despite the fact that his mother was still held immobile, the fawn managed to bend his spindly legs and bow, slowly and hesitantly. The stag moved on, touching several other deer, who all bowed low before him, then stood again with head held low after his gaze had passed on.

David’s teeth began to ache as he clenched them to keep them from chattering. Though he could still move, a part of the spell seemed to have captured him as well. He was unable to tear his eyes from the solemn, dreamlike ceremony taking place before him.

The nebulous deer turned its azure gaze toward David. It fixed, however, not on the man shivering behind the meager juniper, but on the enormous stag standing nearby. The airy muzzle stretched out and touched, and the mortal stag reared, hooves lashing out. The stag fell back to earth again and backed away, hooves having passed through the mist harmlessly. Hovering above, the mist-deer gazed silently at the furious animal, the azure eyes serene and sorrowful.

The stag reared again, hooves slicing the air, vapor rising in clouds as he snorted his challenge. Blue ethereal eyes firmly held the flashing brown corporeal ones. Gradually the striking hooves calmed, the fierce snorting quieted. Slowly, resentfully, the mighty stag bent before his diaphanous counterpart.

The mist-deer stared down at the bowed form before him, gave a gentle nod, then reared high above the herd…and dissipated. Only the fiery blue eyes remained for a moment before they, too, faded into the night. Movement rippled through the herd as the deer were released from the spell cast by the ghostly stag. They milled around aimlessly, and David saw many pairs of eyes turn toward the guardian stag, then look away, only to look back once again.

A muffled snap unexpectedly resounded through the dark at the edge of the slope. In unison, all heads came up, all ears perked sharply. With a bound, the stag leaped away from the noise into darkness, followed by the rest of the herd. Within seconds, David was alone on the hill.

Stiffly, his extremities numb with cold, David stood and looked to see what had startled the deer. Plodding over the rim of the knoll came Sprocket, his head low and his mane swinging drearily with each step. David felt like he was in a trance as he pulled the worn leather halter from his coat pocket and slipped it over Sprocket’s head. Sprocket did not resist or try to run; he merely gazed soulfully at his master as David adjusted the buckles on the halter. With a tug, David started Sprocket down the hill, and together man and beast began the journey back toward the ranch.

*  *  *

The next morning found David preparing to drive into town for supplies. He had awakened late to discover a thick blanket of snow covering the ranch. The clear sky of the night before had been replaced by low white clouds that hung heavily above him as he pried open the frozen door of his rusty green Chevy. The events of the previous night were dim and hazy, and David had nearly convinced himself that they were a dream.

The Chevy left deep tracks in the new snow as David backed onto the rural highway that ran past the ranch. Shifting into first, he winced at the grinding protest made by the cold gears. He had just begun to make progress forward on the ice-packed highway when a figure jumped in front of him. David stomped on the brakes and slid sideways into the low wooden fence that surrounded his house.

He opened his mouth to curse and froze. Staring at him through the haze forming on the windshield were two large brown eyes. The stag from the night before stood in front of him, stark against the white snow. They regarded each other for a single moment, and then the stag turned and bounded across the field. Stunned, David’s eyes followed him as he leapt over the drifts toward the distant mountains.

A sharp crack broke the stillness of the morning, and the stag stumbled and fell. David’s gaze jerked toward the source of the sound. A hunter, orange hat and coat garish against the glacial backdrop, rose up in the field, and David heard his whoop of triumph. High above the tableau, a rift briefly appeared in the piles of white clouds, revealing a glimpse of a searing azure sky before the clouds shrouded it once again.

 

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13 Jan 2006:-) Emma-Jane C. Smith
Elfwood Awards Results!

*Does an authentic presentation dance (with an alarming amount of butt wiggling) as she holds out an award*

You've won! Between Spirit and Dust has won the Best Fantasy Short Story Award! *smiles*

Congradulations!

:-) Angela Perry replies: "Hooray! Thank you! By the way, my e-mail has been on the fritz lately... Did you get the redesigned badge I sent? Also, did you want me to update the web page, or you would like the honors?"
20 Jun 2006:-) Alexandru Moisi
Wow!
that was great!
impressing...
I will have to read it again more carefully but what impressed me most was the word cadaverous or something regarding the eyes...I don't know why...just...brrr...well...good job..
My only rant is why the different description of patches grass..ghostly then white I think... it's something very personal but it distracted me...sorry
It's a good story, I promise to read it again more carefully and rant some more

:-) Angela Perry replies: "Hi Alex! Thanks for the comment! Actually, reading back through this, it seems terribly wordy to me...I need to get the shears out and do some trimming *grin* What about the "ghostly" and "white" did you find distracting? Maybe I can fix it 1"
18 Jan 2007:-) Charlene 'The Amazing Bubble Girl' M. Mattson
Oh, okay, I get it now.
I think you did make it clear that the spirit deer was telling those who were going to die soon because you chose the eldest doe to be chosen first. And then the buck tried to fight death, and failed.
I feel bad for the fawn. I'd hate to know how it dies...

:-) Angela Perry replies: "*gasp* You got it! Yay! Not many people do... Did you figure that out from reading the story, or from the comments? Because that is the weakest point in this story, trying to communicate the theme without sounding like a tree-hugger (I finally gave up)."
16 Feb 200745 L. Shanra Kuepers
Nothing moved in this silent, dead world. loved this. It was so, so beautifully described and so captivating. Short, but so incredibly powerful. I love how you've conveyed everything without ever saying it. I love the dream-like quality that all of it has and the beauty of it.

*peeks at comments, smiles* I don't think you need to clarify what the mist-deer does at all. To be honest, I think the only thing clarifying it would do is ruin the story. You've got all the hints in there (as people have already stated), so people will pick up on it. ^-^ (Yes, okay, stating it in the comments will help, but it's not needed is my point.)

*applauds* That was absolutely gorgeous.

:-) Angela Perry replies: "Thanks, Shanra! This is an older one, but it's still one of my favorites. I like your idea about taking out the exclamation point. I think this is the only time I've ever used one in narrative, and it felt awkward to me too. Using italics is a super idea 1So you understood it? Yay! That makes two people *grins* Everyone thought I was trying to be a tree hugger. I haven't been a tree hugger for at least 5 years ;-)"
1 Mar 2007:-) Panu Karjalainen
There's always bound to be a few people who don't "get it" right away, but that's just good, it makes people think. Personally I'd hate to write stories that everybody understood from the first. Of course, there's such a thing as too ambiguous, but I don't think that applies here...

Once I got into it, the atmosphere was really nice. I think you could polish the two starting paragraphs a bit, you use the coating metaphor twice and the word "frost" is repeated as well. Otherwise, I really did enjoy it. The glimpse of the sky at the end is a great touch, at once both sad and satisfied...

:-) Angela Perry replies: "I'm glad you liked it! I agree, it does need some polishing. This is the first story I wrote after a particularly long (couple year) hiatus from writing. That's why I posted it here on Elfwood, so I could get useful input like yours ;-)"
20 Mar 2007:-) Jon Midget
Utterly beautiful story. At times you reiterate things you have already described—sometimes in a more flowery way (i.e. azure eyes, obsidian sky) than I usually prefer. But that's more an example of style preference than critique.

What I loved about the piece is how it treats death (and yes, I got that the fawn and old doe were going to die, too). In the 21st century life is unbelievably sanitized, and death is almost unthinkable. But that's an anomaly. In the natural world the old and young die all the time. It's just how it is. This story takes that fact and turns what we often find kind of cruel (as if nature could be cruel) and makes it almost holy.

That's the miracle of the story, that death, though feared by the deer, was also a religious and holy experience. It's a way to regard it that so different from most 21st century cultures.

Incidentally, death wasn't so uncommon or sanitized for people even a hundred years ago. My wife and I were reading up on her family history and discovered her great-great grandmother (and a 2-year-old) were among the tens of millions in the U.S. that died in the flu epidemic of 1918. And if you go back a little further, she had an ancestor who had 30 children (1800's polygamy), 11 of whom died before they were 10 years old.

When you get right down to it our modern view of death is utterly bizarre compared with the rest of the world (even human world before 1950's). Your story fantastically gives a more realistic view of death and makes it (kind of) beautiful—though still frightening.

:-) Angela Perry replies: "Wow, thanks Jon! I'm glad you understood. Even my husband thought it was me being a "tree-hugger" ie, don't shoot the deer, bad hunter, etc.I would like to cut down on some of the wordiness 1 This was the first story I had written in years, so I went a little nuts playing with the language. I plan to pare it down and submit it for publication to a fantasy magazine at some point *crosses fingers*One of my favoriate subjects is trying to look at what we fear/take for granted/no longer respect from a different point of view. Most of my stories address that theme somewhere, because I want people to take a step back from the world they live in and look at it through different eyes. People create big fancy magical worlds...yet our own world is so magical, if we only look... I'm so glad it worked for you!Thanks for returning, by the way!"
23 Mar 2007:-) Lindsay Verde
This was very poignant, and doesn't need any extra clarification at all I find. I loved the descriptions, the imagery was beautiful ... I could just feel the cold and the frost biting my fingers. It's wonderful how you sneak in all those little descriptions that make the piece come alive and most writers forget. Beautiful.

:-) Angela Perry replies: "Thanks! Some people really like the descriptions, and some people think I went way overboard ;-) I'm glad to hear you understood it, though. It gives me more confidence in the story."
28 May 2007:-) Sarah-amy haley
Was that deer "Death?" Very different from the usual skeleton in a black robe. Nice. I had to read some comments to come to that conclusion, but I liked that about it, the way some parts aren't always obvious. Personally I did get the wrong end of stick when I first read it and thought the mist deer was protecting them and that the stag was being all macho about it, which gave the ending a very different, slightly ironic feel. Ah well...

Beautifully written, so much so that I didn't even think it was fantasy at first - though I finally realised that, no, no matter how well it was described in the story, I have never seen a 'foggy Death deer' rise from the mist.

Great story...SMILE...

:-) Angela Perry replies: "Yes, you got it! The deer is death *dun dun dun* Although if course you are welcome to interpret it however you like ;-)You've totally spoiled me, Sarah! What a lovely collection of comments you left me *gathers them in a basket and admires them* You have also *drumroll* left my 200th overall comment!!! Thus, I award you with the great 200th comment prize of...um...what would you like? Story? Poem? What topic? Let me know! *hugs*"
1 Jun 2007:-) Sarah-amy haley
Hello again : )

I've thought about this 200th comment prize, and now I set you 'Ye Old Ferocious Fourteen Word Challenge!' - mainly because I like the number fourteen - it's a nice emerald number, I think....

You challenge is to make a poem or short story which includes all the following fourteen "interesting" words below (You can use other words too - I’m really not that mean!). The words can be used in any order or tense and the actual poem /short story can be about what ever you want .

Soooooo, your key words are:

-Bilious
-Farcical
-Kerfuffle
-Mackintosh
-Melon
-Pantaloons
-Quack
-Sauté
-Shower Cap
-Turnip
-Turpentine
-Underdog
-Vertigo
-Waffle

Teehee - I had fun picking the words.

Now, have fun, and if you really object to the idea please feel free to hit me round the back of the head with a wooden spoon, and I’ll think of something else…

…Enjoy… And SMILE : )

:-) Angela Perry replies: "Woo hoo! Sounds like a fun challenge 1 I may come after you with kitchen utensils later, but for the moment, I'll just offer you some peach pie *hands peach pie* *runs to start on story*"
2 Jul 2008:-) Kelsey M. Graham
*looks at above list* for extra credit you could throw ’persnickety’ in there somewhere... 1
having just come from the snow dragon story, I have to say that you are amazing at writing winter scenes. *shivers* I feel cold now...

:-) Angela Perry replies: "I do write a lot of winter stuff. That’s what happens when you grow up in a frozen wasteland ;-)"
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About 'Between Spirit and Dust':
 • Status: OK
 • Created by: :-) Angela Perry
 • Copyright: ©Angela Perry. All rights reserved!

 • Keywords: Deer, Stag, Death, Ghost, Spirit, Desert, Ranch, Horse
 • Categories: Angels, Religious, Spiritual, Holy, Ghosts, Ghouls, Aparitions, Mythical Creatures & Assorted Monsters, Urban Fantasy and/or Cyberpunk, Afterlife
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